Here is a link to my outline.

Informative Outline.docx

Name: Chelsea

Comments: You had a very clear statement of your topic and good transitions throughout the speech. You also did a great job of relating the topic to your audience.  For next time, just try to place your pauses a little more carefully. <3 Chelsea

Name: Aimee

Comments: Mark..! Your speech is really well written, no wonder your on the Collegian! I can't wait to see how you present it... Your transitions blend it a lot which is good but I'd just make sure that you give a good pause in between the Main Points. -- Aimee

Name: Eric

Comments: Mark, I liked listening to your speech a lot. Your transitions flowed really well, it seemed well prepared, and the writing was very fluent. Great job today

Name: Kelsie

Comments: Mark, good job today! I think you did a really good job you did really well with eye contact and you projected you speech very well. The only thing that I think you should work on for next time is not to annouce your main points in the introduction like you did with saying that this is going to be my first point and this will be my second..instead try to make them more subtle. But other than that I think you did really good!

Name:Brielle

Comments: I think you did an awesome job projecting your speech to the class.

Name: Katie Castellano

Comments: Hey Mark..great job today!  Your introduction had me hooked from the begining! You are a really good speaker and very conversational.! Maybe use some gestures and a little more eye contact next time though!

Name: Alan

Comments: Mark, I thought your speech today was awesome. It proved to me that you knew what you were talking about. I also liked the attention getter with the "picture this" line. You had a pause here and there, but you rocked it. Nice inclusion on sources as well to establish credibility. Cool.

Name: Sam

Comments: Mark, I thought that your speech today was really good. Your information was backed up well and the only advice I have would be to speak with more of a flow instead of taking random pauses, other than that though it was great.

Name: Danielle

Comments: I think you did a great job yesterday mark! my only advice would be to try to avoid the awkward pausing.  aside from that you're speech was very well put together, nice work!